Bang.
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Great first poem, I am there too.

The obvious critique would be too much use of the word 'and', but after re-reading the poem I like its use.

Keep 'em coming.
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Bang. - by jacklikesyou - 05-01-2013, 12:57 PM
RE: Bang. - by Magpie - 05-01-2013, 02:55 PM
RE: Bang. - by YaMarVa - 05-01-2013, 11:32 PM
RE: Bang. - by serge gurkski - 05-02-2013, 01:56 AM
RE: Bang. - by Brownlie - 05-04-2013, 06:52 AM



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