Personal Column

[Smiffy]

Liked this, kinda been there more than enough so felt the emotion, just a few minor things I'd consider lookingat though as I say enjoyed as is.

When our goodbyes
were done,
and you walked
out of my life -
forever! so you said - maybe move forever up to follow life
I promised myself
that I would forget you.
And I did – for a while.
But then you started
coming back,
just gradually at first:
your old blue shirt,
our favourite song,
a book we’d both read.
And then, suddenly, lose the and, I don't think you need it
you were everywhere.
All day long
and half the night; [/i]again lose the and
in my thoughts
and in my dreams. again lose the and and move in my dreams up to follow thoughts losing the in
Dreaming? This does not work for me with the question mark
I wake in the darkness,
and reach for you -
to find the loneliness
of empty space,
and cry myself maybe crying myself
to sleep again.
It’s killing me.
So, please,
wherever you are,
leave me alone -
or come back to me.
Please. you could lose the please in my eyes, creates a sense of weakness rather than the ultimatum of come back or not

as I said enjoyed as is ,been there more often than I would care to admit
cheers for the read Smiffy