The Feeling

[Volaticus]

The Feeling

I miss the feeling of thinking, I don't think comma's needed
about another, about our future, another what?
My, smiles rise from those images. Unless you mean 'oh my', there shouldn't be a comma. You talk about images, but they're not shown.

I miss the feeling of being, Doesn't need comma
next to another, on another, By only writing 'another', and not 'another person' (etc) makes it sound odd to me. If you're talking about a specific person, you could write 'each other'.
The scene of oils on the cloth. There's an image here. The poem could definitely benefit from more images.

I miss the feeling of spending, No comma
my time, energy, and even worries, This and the line above doesn't seem complete. Should 'spending' be 'sharing'?
Oh, the effort we put in.

I miss the feeling of feeling,
in general, from the thoughts, presence,
and times with another.

Missing is a feeling I'd like to replace with actual feelings. This line doesn't work for me


-Viv

Just some thoughts.
Best,