04-27-2013, 09:05 AM
(04-27-2013, 07:54 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote: Hi Ajax, I like the opening line to this poem, it draws me in straight away.Okay, thanks I ill try to fix that up, and come up with a better rhyme. Thanks for the comments!
Just needs some work on the metre and the rhyme of "violence" and "futileness" doesn't work.

