A Theory
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(04-27-2013, 07:54 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  Hi Ajax, I like the opening line to this poem, it draws me in straight away.
Just needs some work on the metre and the rhyme of "violence" and "futileness" doesn't work.
Okay, thanks I ill try to fix that up, and come up with a better rhyme. Thanks for the comments!
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A Theory - by Ajax - 04-24-2013, 10:09 AM
RE: A Theory - by YaMarVa - 04-27-2013, 12:55 AM
RE: A Theory - by Magpie - 04-27-2013, 07:54 AM
RE: A Theory - by Ajax - 04-27-2013, 09:05 AM
RE: A Theory - by Volaticus - 04-27-2013, 11:31 PM
RE: A Theory - by Ajax - 04-28-2013, 01:47 AM
RE: A Theory - by rowens - 04-29-2013, 01:47 AM



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