A Theory
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Hi Ajax, I like the opening line to this poem, it draws me in straight away.
Just needs some work on the metre and the rhyme of "violence" and "futileness" doesn't work.
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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A Theory - by Ajax - 04-24-2013, 10:09 AM
RE: A Theory - by YaMarVa - 04-27-2013, 12:55 AM
RE: A Theory - by Magpie - 04-27-2013, 07:54 AM
RE: A Theory - by Ajax - 04-27-2013, 09:05 AM
RE: A Theory - by Volaticus - 04-27-2013, 11:31 PM
RE: A Theory - by Ajax - 04-28-2013, 01:47 AM
RE: A Theory - by rowens - 04-29-2013, 01:47 AM



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