Clarity of Mind
#5
I really liked the first two verses. It felt like you wrote exactly what you wanted to say. I'm not sure how much rhyming adds to the last four verses though. Maybe if you don't restrict yourself you can make a bigger impact at the end.
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Clarity of Mind - by phrvshtumblr - 04-19-2013, 01:10 AM
RE: Clarity of Mind - by Glittercake - 04-19-2013, 02:11 AM
RE: Clarity of Mind - by Volaticus - 04-19-2013, 07:31 AM
RE: Clarity of Mind - by Magpie - 04-23-2013, 05:12 PM
RE: Clarity of Mind - by Rook - 04-26-2013, 09:26 PM



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