04-25-2013, 07:43 AM
Hey guys, thats for the feedback!
Ambrosial, I tried to use bold on certain words to emphasize them, make them stand out more and add more affect. This was my first time adding a poem to the forum, some words are ment to be italicized I just couldn't get it to work. When it comes to the repetitiveness of the Dear Mr.Prime Minister, in the actual poem I tried to space it out because that is supposed to be the title. The poem starts at 'We....'. I appreciate the feedback once again and I will try to apply it as best I can, as for the poem America I have never read it but I will be shore to check it out, thanks!
Rowens, I appreciate how you give me feedback throughout the whole poem. I added periods to try and emphasize those words, to try and create a pause before the reader carries on. I was contemplating the 'then and than' last night aha. I just went what I originally wrote down, but I'm glad you mentioned it and I plan to change it to 'than'. When it comes to the 'dept' it's just an error in my spelling, I had every intention to write debt, thanks for catching that. Again, thank you for the feedback, It will help me with future works.
Destinie
Ambrosial, I tried to use bold on certain words to emphasize them, make them stand out more and add more affect. This was my first time adding a poem to the forum, some words are ment to be italicized I just couldn't get it to work. When it comes to the repetitiveness of the Dear Mr.Prime Minister, in the actual poem I tried to space it out because that is supposed to be the title. The poem starts at 'We....'. I appreciate the feedback once again and I will try to apply it as best I can, as for the poem America I have never read it but I will be shore to check it out, thanks!
Rowens, I appreciate how you give me feedback throughout the whole poem. I added periods to try and emphasize those words, to try and create a pause before the reader carries on. I was contemplating the 'then and than' last night aha. I just went what I originally wrote down, but I'm glad you mentioned it and I plan to change it to 'than'. When it comes to the 'dept' it's just an error in my spelling, I had every intention to write debt, thanks for catching that. Again, thank you for the feedback, It will help me with future works.
Destinie