04-24-2013, 03:48 PM
Preta
As void as drum, his tummy ached,
while spindly fingers bathed in drink
by altar set for him who’s draped
in ocher stone, and does not blink.
To ease this thirst would make his mind
as void as drum. His tummy ached,
while fingers bathed and lips confined
thin throat to gut, grey-pumpkin shaped.
“Now don’t forget,” an old voice scraped.
His pimples raised; he’d thought the room
as void as drum. His tummy ached.
The grandson finally broke the gloom:
“May ghosts now feast on merit made!”
Then fingers left from bowl, escaped,
while we should pray his place has stayed
as void as drum, where once he’d ached.
~~~
Drat, I've fallen behind and can't catch up. Oh well.
And I realized too late that I'd paired the refrains with near rhymes. Apparently I don't know how to use a dictionary!
)
And as for the rest of you: you're golden, in case you didn't know that (although you probably already do).
I'll probably have something for the 23rd on the 24th, or 25th in the AM.
As void as drum, his tummy ached,
while spindly fingers bathed in drink
by altar set for him who’s draped
in ocher stone, and does not blink.
To ease this thirst would make his mind
as void as drum. His tummy ached,
while fingers bathed and lips confined
thin throat to gut, grey-pumpkin shaped.
“Now don’t forget,” an old voice scraped.
His pimples raised; he’d thought the room
as void as drum. His tummy ached.
The grandson finally broke the gloom:
“May ghosts now feast on merit made!”
Then fingers left from bowl, escaped,
while we should pray his place has stayed
as void as drum, where once he’d ached.
~~~
Drat, I've fallen behind and can't catch up. Oh well.
And I realized too late that I'd paired the refrains with near rhymes. Apparently I don't know how to use a dictionary!
(04-23-2013, 04:50 PM)cidermaid Wrote: esp Mikey you have been consistantly turning out some great writes.Thank you so much for the compliment, Cidermaid! I've also been enjoying your poems, even though you think them only 'drafts.' (I'd love to see the polished versions
)And as for the rest of you: you're golden, in case you didn't know that (although you probably already do).
I'll probably have something for the 23rd on the 24th, or 25th in the AM.