The Humble Lion

[NakedBear]

How much more poetic would his death have been
if a lion had ripped his head off?

All good, but the last line doesn't do it for me. I mentally replace it with "if a lion had ate his throat?"

At first I tried "if a lion had ate his heart?", but then thought "fuck yeah, that would have been poetic" So probably not what you want to do with that last line.

Otherwise its all good.