what to say. it's long 
i think it's a bloody great big open mic rant that would be an excellent piece of entertainment. i could never line by line it. but i've read it a few times and some of the ideas/thoughts spill over into subsequent sections of the poem. while i had no problem with this, it could perhaps be better served without some of the redundancies and repetitions.
the voice in the piece is explosive. it flirts with cliche on more than a few occasions but bugger me, i love it. while it's generalised, it does cover enough ground to be original. i think the use of the block lists was used to it full potential and i think the mescaline you took worked fine, the poem is like some kind of connection to the ills of the psych. it's a train of thought that never ends, the line spacing extended the poem a little to much but i still enjoyed it.
i think it's a bloody great big open mic rant that would be an excellent piece of entertainment. i could never line by line it. but i've read it a few times and some of the ideas/thoughts spill over into subsequent sections of the poem. while i had no problem with this, it could perhaps be better served without some of the redundancies and repetitions.
the voice in the piece is explosive. it flirts with cliche on more than a few occasions but bugger me, i love it. while it's generalised, it does cover enough ground to be original. i think the use of the block lists was used to it full potential and i think the mescaline you took worked fine, the poem is like some kind of connection to the ills of the psych. it's a train of thought that never ends, the line spacing extended the poem a little to much but i still enjoyed it.