04-18-2013, 09:38 AM
There are some standout parts in your poem...
I really like the its been thirty years since i took out my breast line. Very good way to have the reader get a grasp of who this narrator is... With that said I think there is still lots to be done to bring the voice out in the piece... I am unsure what kind of person the narrator is... How old is she right now? I dont know, good start.
I really like the its been thirty years since i took out my breast line. Very good way to have the reader get a grasp of who this narrator is... With that said I think there is still lots to be done to bring the voice out in the piece... I am unsure what kind of person the narrator is... How old is she right now? I dont know, good start.