04-16-2013, 07:26 AM
Hi Amy,
I totally get what you're saying about the abstractions. But I'm not sure how to work around it, 'cause it was somehow intentional. I'll try to explain.. With the poem, I was trying to tell, that even though it's the 'you' that's the addict, it's the 'I' that ends op overdosed. That's why I didn't want the 'you' to have any direct indicators ('threshold', 'overdose'), only the 'I' should have those. Did that make sense? Otherwise sorry, I'm not feeling too bright today.
I totally get what you're saying about the abstractions. But I'm not sure how to work around it, 'cause it was somehow intentional. I'll try to explain.. With the poem, I was trying to tell, that even though it's the 'you' that's the addict, it's the 'I' that ends op overdosed. That's why I didn't want the 'you' to have any direct indicators ('threshold', 'overdose'), only the 'I' should have those. Did that make sense? Otherwise sorry, I'm not feeling too bright today.