04-16-2013, 06:57 AM
This is an idea I've been fiddling with for quite some time now. I've edited the poem so many times, so now I've just gotten stuck. It would mean a great deal to me, to get some feedback, so hopefully I can get back on track again with this poem (I don't like scrapping poems, just because I'm a bit stuck). Thanks a lot in advance :-)
Long Gone
Inside that secret land of yours,
You tried so hard to stay the course.
I'd try to ease your dismal wailing,
Though I'd always end up failing.
Now my threshold has been reached,
Your fence too strong for me to breach.
Your afebrile psychosis,
Became my final overdoses.
Long Gone
Inside that secret land of yours,
You tried so hard to stay the course.
I'd try to ease your dismal wailing,
Though I'd always end up failing.
Now my threshold has been reached,
Your fence too strong for me to breach.
Your afebrile psychosis,
Became my final overdoses.