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Falling Apart

Ajax

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04-16-2013, 06:26 AM

I would have to agree with the first comment, in that the change of perspective (I'm assuming it's not a typo although I could be mistaken) can be quite confusing. I would suggest modifying those stanzas or just getting rid of them.

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Falling Apart - by thelittleking - 04-12-2013, 07:50 AM

RE: Falling Apart - by UnicornRainbowCake - 04-12-2013, 08:59 AM

RE: Falling Apart - by billy - 04-12-2013, 01:57 PM

RE: Falling Apart - by Simba - 04-13-2013, 05:53 AM

RE: Falling Apart - by Ajax - 04-16-2013, 06:26 AM

RE: Falling Apart - by JaimeeKent - 04-18-2013, 03:19 AM

RE: Falling Apart - by phrvshtumblr - 04-19-2013, 01:02 AM

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