04-15-2013, 12:44 AM
I like the simplicity. And the distinct change of tone, between the two stanzas.
"Work hard
make gravy, sure,
maybe some nice shirts
or a good stereo"
Is the narrator also making nice shirts and a good stereo?
"maybe get some nice shirts" would perhaps make a bit more sense?
Just a small thought.
Thanks for sharing
"Work hard
make gravy, sure,
maybe some nice shirts
or a good stereo"
Is the narrator also making nice shirts and a good stereo?
"maybe get some nice shirts" would perhaps make a bit more sense?
Just a small thought.
Thanks for sharing

