My cat (a doggerel)
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(04-13-2013, 07:41 AM)Crepuscule Wrote:  
(04-13-2013, 07:35 AM)UnicornRainbowCake Wrote:  The best bit is the title.

My cat (a doggerel) - oh my.

I really enjoyed it, to start with. I don't have much critique for it because I find it to be a sound poem. I'm not sure however about '(he relishes banana skins)'. I think it interrupts the flow too much for it to be worth the content.

Although the first line is strong I don't know if the whole 'I hate you, you hate me' is a bit overdone. Perhaps 'It's evident my cat hates me.' or something similar?
I don't really hate him.
But does he not really hate you?

Just kitten around. :-P
- Amy

(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)


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My cat (a doggerel) - by Crepuscule - 04-13-2013, 07:19 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by Volaticus - 04-13-2013, 07:32 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by UnicornRainbowCake - 04-13-2013, 07:35 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by Crepuscule - 04-13-2013, 07:41 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by UnicornRainbowCake - 04-13-2013, 08:29 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by serge gurkski - 04-13-2013, 07:43 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by Crepuscule - 04-13-2013, 08:02 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by serge gurkski - 04-13-2013, 08:06 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by Crepuscule - 04-13-2013, 09:13 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by billy - 04-13-2013, 09:18 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by heslopian - 04-13-2013, 10:52 AM
RE: My cat (a doggerel) - by Crepuscule - 04-13-2013, 07:00 PM



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