04-13-2013, 07:35 AM
The best bit is the title.
My cat (a doggerel) - oh my.
I really enjoyed it, to start with. I don't have much critique for it because I find it to be a sound poem. I'm not sure however about '(he relishes banana skins)'. I think it interrupts the flow too much for it to be worth the content.
Although the first line is strong I don't know if the whole 'I hate you, you hate me' is a bit overdone. Perhaps 'It's evident my cat hates me.' or something similar?
My cat (a doggerel) - oh my.
I really enjoyed it, to start with. I don't have much critique for it because I find it to be a sound poem. I'm not sure however about '(he relishes banana skins)'. I think it interrupts the flow too much for it to be worth the content.
Although the first line is strong I don't know if the whole 'I hate you, you hate me' is a bit overdone. Perhaps 'It's evident my cat hates me.' or something similar?
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)