04-12-2013, 03:10 AM
My only real critique is on this part -
Regardless of emotions,
Be it animosity or acrimony,
Bliss or exultant,
Sorrow or affliction,
Apprehensive or distressed,
Love or affection,
Poetry, to the bitter end!
I think it is too wordy - why not nervous or sad? Don't get rid of all of them, but it's a little overkill with all of these words in it.
Regardless of emotions,
Be it animosity or acrimony,
Bliss or exultant,
Sorrow or affliction,
Apprehensive or distressed,
Love or affection,
Poetry, to the bitter end!
I think it is too wordy - why not nervous or sad? Don't get rid of all of them, but it's a little overkill with all of these words in it.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)