04-12-2013, 02:54 AM
(04-12-2013, 01:59 AM)Snags Wrote: Thank you. I've been wracking my brain for an alternative to "oft" that doesn't change the meaning or upset something intangible - it is a bit poncey (but I can be a bit poncey in normal speech, so ...). Perhaps a "maybe"; "often" feels to close to "usually". I shall away to my garret with a stub of candle and sweat out some inspiration!What I love about this poem is the simplicity of the idea, but the deep meaning it has. Swop 'oft' to 'as a rule'? 'generally?' Something not too complicated. It's in the simplicity of your words and structure that makes the real impact with the idea, I think.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)