04-12-2013, 01:54 AM
Love it, definitely stronger for the edit.
Question: 3rd stanza, is it "seeped" or is that a typo for "steeped"?
Ridiculous nit-pick idea #1: final stanza, it might be worth considering replacing the "and" with a simple comma in the 3rd line (Nothing is safe, no place to hide)??
Ridiculous nit-pick idea #2: also final stanza, "Once-full" instead of "Once full" - or is that me mis-reading the purpose of once in that line?
But they really are stupidly tiny thoughts that I'm not convinced of. I still really like it. Not sure whether I want to know what a creep cat looks like or not!
Question: 3rd stanza, is it "seeped" or is that a typo for "steeped"?
Ridiculous nit-pick idea #1: final stanza, it might be worth considering replacing the "and" with a simple comma in the 3rd line (Nothing is safe, no place to hide)??
Ridiculous nit-pick idea #2: also final stanza, "Once-full" instead of "Once full" - or is that me mis-reading the purpose of once in that line?
But they really are stupidly tiny thoughts that I'm not convinced of. I still really like it. Not sure whether I want to know what a creep cat looks like or not!