04-12-2013, 01:51 AM
Hi,
I noticed that in the first stanza, you use the word 'unsettled' followed by 'balance'. I can't quite figure out what you mean there. Actually, the poem was quite pleasant to read, but it is just too abstract. You need some punctuation corrections too. If you decide to edit the poem, I'll look forward to see what you've come up with
I noticed that in the first stanza, you use the word 'unsettled' followed by 'balance'. I can't quite figure out what you mean there. Actually, the poem was quite pleasant to read, but it is just too abstract. You need some punctuation corrections too. If you decide to edit the poem, I'll look forward to see what you've come up with