Let's be United

[karinane]

I agree with the others that many of the lines at the beginning are difficult to read (ie: "When I about this world ponder and reckon," "Wherever I see , there're bloodsheds and fights," "The sky once blue is with blood now red"). The last three stanzas are more directly stated and easier to read, and therefore flow better. I would focus more on what you are saying and less on the rhyming structure. I enjoyed it though. A very good start!