The Waiting Game (second edit)

[Volaticus]

I like it a lot and think that the revision is a definite improvement

Something doesn't quite work with this part in the first stanza:

But I know you;
I know of the monsters you fear-
You wouldn't be ready to hear.

Maybe move the lines around a bit? like...
But I know you; You wouldn't be ready to hear
I know of the monsters that you fear

or something like that.

Hi karinane,
Thanks a lot for your kind words
I see what you mean, it does sound a bit odd, in the first stanza. I'll try and tweak it, so it sounds more right.
I appreciate your critique, it helps me a lot, thanks