04-11-2013, 01:08 AM
To simplify,
Scientific terms are cold and sterile. They lack the warm, poetic, Profundity that you are reaching for in in relating natural perceptions to the philosophical 'where I need to be, making this poem not about the highlands, but about yourself, and your mycology. I know are a fungi, but your spores just aren't that interesting. The over-glossed alliteration disrupts the imagery, and renders bryophytes germane. Is that better?
Scientific terms are cold and sterile. They lack the warm, poetic, Profundity that you are reaching for in in relating natural perceptions to the philosophical 'where I need to be, making this poem not about the highlands, but about yourself, and your mycology. I know are a fungi, but your spores just aren't that interesting. The over-glossed alliteration disrupts the imagery, and renders bryophytes germane. Is that better?