04-10-2013, 07:52 AM
This is what you wrote:
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That is EXACTLY your words. You wish for constructive criticism? Read what you posted then tell me why I should give up my time when you have given so little of yours. Are you happy with this? Do you seek to fool me into thinking you had written a poem when all you have done is write nonsense on more lines than a call-centre in Mumbai. Look, you have an idea, a concept, that you wish to share. Do you not feel an obligation to make yourself clear. I do not wish your unseemly decadence to rot to animate what your estranged limbs miss...really, I don't.
Read it out loud then rewrite it. No poetry should be wasted though some should be gjven a dignified death. Do not give up on this.I want to know what it is about. Write poetry.
Best,
tectak
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That is EXACTLY your words. You wish for constructive criticism? Read what you posted then tell me why I should give up my time when you have given so little of yours. Are you happy with this? Do you seek to fool me into thinking you had written a poem when all you have done is write nonsense on more lines than a call-centre in Mumbai. Look, you have an idea, a concept, that you wish to share. Do you not feel an obligation to make yourself clear. I do not wish your unseemly decadence to rot to animate what your estranged limbs miss...really, I don't.
Read it out loud then rewrite it. No poetry should be wasted though some should be gjven a dignified death. Do not give up on this.I want to know what it is about. Write poetry.
Best,
tectak