04-10-2013, 06:45 AM
Hi,
I liked reading this :-) I think it has a nice flow for the most part, but I would probably break it into several stanzas for better flow and less confusion. And maybe a little trimming of some words here and there, for cohesiveness. It's not my intention to sound critical, 'cause I really enjoyed reading your poem :-)
- Volaticus
I liked reading this :-) I think it has a nice flow for the most part, but I would probably break it into several stanzas for better flow and less confusion. And maybe a little trimming of some words here and there, for cohesiveness. It's not my intention to sound critical, 'cause I really enjoyed reading your poem :-)
- Volaticus