04-09-2013, 11:15 AM
(04-08-2013, 05:33 PM)UnicornRainbowCake Wrote: I enjoyed reading this - there are only a few little things I would personally change.I kind of wanted to keep it vague, and i originally had it broken up into multiple stanzas but i guess you could say outside influence made me decide to split it up. Thanks for the input!
- The title isn't very eye-catching and is very vague. Then again, that could be your intention, I can't judge that.
- Try splitting up your poem into stanzas to make it flow a little better and make it a little easier to read.
