My journey
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(04-08-2013, 05:33 PM)UnicornRainbowCake Wrote:  I enjoyed reading this - there are only a few little things I would personally change.

- The title isn't very eye-catching and is very vague. Then again, that could be your intention, I can't judge that.
- Try splitting up your poem into stanzas to make it flow a little better and make it a little easier to read. Smile
I kind of wanted to keep it vague, and i originally had it broken up into multiple stanzas but i guess you could say outside influence made me decide to split it up. Thanks for the input! Smile
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My journey - by Lycanthe - 04-07-2013, 01:49 PM
RE: My journey - by rowens - 04-08-2013, 03:14 AM
RE: My journey - by Lycanthe - 04-08-2013, 09:33 AM
RE: My journey - by UnicornRainbowCake - 04-08-2013, 05:33 PM
RE: My journey - by Lycanthe - 04-09-2013, 11:15 AM
RE: My journey - by Volaticus - 04-10-2013, 06:45 AM
RE: My journey - by Lycanthe - 04-11-2013, 10:48 AM
RE: My journey - by UnicornRainbowCake - 04-11-2013, 05:07 PM
RE: My journey - by Volaticus - 04-11-2013, 07:48 PM
RE: My journey - by pratheeksha - 04-11-2013, 09:27 PM



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