04-08-2013, 05:33 PM
I enjoyed reading this - there are only a few little things I would personally change.
- The title isn't very eye-catching and is very vague. Then again, that could be your intention, I can't judge that.
- Try splitting up your poem into stanzas to make it flow a little better and make it a little easier to read.
- The title isn't very eye-catching and is very vague. Then again, that could be your intention, I can't judge that.
- Try splitting up your poem into stanzas to make it flow a little better and make it a little easier to read.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)