"Destiny"
By: Elizabeth Lestrad (as Yukiko Kazumi)
A lone warrior treads
softly over crimson snow
to her destiny.
There's three things I'm trying to portray here:
1. Sadness on the part of the author/subject
2. When it takes place, and what's going on around her.
3. A warrior's courage in the face of death.
I don't claim to be a poet, but am seeking critiques to see if I meet my own objectives within the Haiku and to seek suggestions/advice on translating it into a proper 5-7-5 Japanese haiku in the traditional style.
By: Elizabeth Lestrad (as Yukiko Kazumi)
A lone warrior treads
softly over crimson snow
to her destiny.
There's three things I'm trying to portray here:
1. Sadness on the part of the author/subject
2. When it takes place, and what's going on around her.
3. A warrior's courage in the face of death.
I don't claim to be a poet, but am seeking critiques to see if I meet my own objectives within the Haiku and to seek suggestions/advice on translating it into a proper 5-7-5 Japanese haiku in the traditional style.