NaPM April 3 2013

[neena2504]

Good morning everyone....
here's mine

Each sunup a wrinkled granny
takes the bus to Breitenrain,
seats herself next to the driver,
talks to him in shine or rain.

She offers him some hazel nuts
he takes them all with gratitude
and wonders why would she do that?
He can't take it any more, implores
her why is she so kind?

The granny grins toothless, says,
"Son I like the chocolate-nuts
so I suck the stuff around
but the nuts my gums can't grind
and I just hate to throw them all.

;-)

I loved this, I don't understand why you abandoned the rhyme and meter?

Here I've worked on the rhyme and meter, donno if it spoiled the joke though...

Each sunup a wrinkled granny
takes the bus to Breitenrain,
seats herself next to the driver,
talks to him in shine or rain.

She gives him daily, hazel nuts,
he takes them all with gratiude
one day at last, puzzled enough,
he asks the reason, intrigued.

The granny grins toothless, says,
"Son I like the chocolate-nuts
so I suck the stuff around and
when what's left is just the nuts,
I offer you the big and small
'coz I just hate to throw them all.