Echo

[UnicornRainbowCake]

I really loved this poem so took to google to read something by Steven Jesse Bernstein - what a great assignment to be set! I think the poem itself is really strong, clear in it's meaning and altogether a really sound piece.

I'm no expert in poetry and certainly no expert in Bernstein as I've just read a few poems, so I'm speaking from that - I think that it is very much in similar to his work, but I think this would make it more in the style of it:

- Although the poem concerns the speaker, I think it could have more depth if you included the feelings, as well as his/her actions. Such as in 'More Noise, Please!' -

I put sponge stoppers
in my ears,
but I can't stand those things
for more than a few minutes.

I really agree with Milo and Serge on the third stanza being the strongest. It's absolutely beautiful. As a poem, I wouldn't change it, as in the style of Bernstein, I'd add in a few little opinions and inner thoughts here and there.