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[milo]

Thanks for the response In not sure I quite understand what modification really means here. English is not my first language, and it seems to be a bit of an obstacle for me at times. Does modifications mean like ehm.. that it's not so good to use adjectives for nouns and verbs? Or am I way off here?

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I thought I had my seasonal reference in the word 'cold'..

as for the 'cold' I was referring to mine. I introduced crone which is fall.

actually, more true to the original

crone
heaves sacks
august

heaves implies both the lifting and the ample

Modifying - yes, describing your nouns and verbs, usually best to find a different noun or verb if you can.