03-31-2013, 07:09 AM
Hi,
I think your poem is great in many ways. It seemed heartfelt and strong. I really, really liked the first 12 lines. I think the images work great, and it has good flow. What I didn't like so much, is that it becomes a bit too wordy after those 12 first lines. In my opinion anyways, but I'm also no expert
Thanks for the read
- Volaticus
I think your poem is great in many ways. It seemed heartfelt and strong. I really, really liked the first 12 lines. I think the images work great, and it has good flow. What I didn't like so much, is that it becomes a bit too wordy after those 12 first lines. In my opinion anyways, but I'm also no expert
Thanks for the read
- Volaticus