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"Are You Dreaming?"
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03-31-2013, 05:38 AM
(03-31-2013, 04:37 AM)Volaticus Wrote: I've posted a rewrite of the poem, thanks to milo's invaluable advise. I tried really hard, so I hope I've improved it at least some. I think I didimo - the new version is worlds better. It is much tighter, the flow is nicer and it is more focused on the details and images. There is more that could be done, but you might want to move it out of novice and into mild. milo |
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"Are You Dreaming?" - by Volaticus - 03-30-2013, 09:04 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by milo - 03-30-2013, 10:00 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by Volaticus - 03-30-2013, 10:30 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by milo - 03-30-2013, 10:52 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 01:07 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 04:37 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by milo - 03-31-2013, 05:38 AM
RE: "Are You Dreaming?" - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 05:46 AM
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