03-30-2013, 03:16 AM
Hi dandan,
First, I enjoyed reading your poem, so thanks
I thought that the imagery and the metaphors in the poem was a very nice concept/idea.
The line "Sorry. Bliss. Anger. Boredom". For me, it's like the words don't fully match the context of the rest of the poem.
The rest I picked up on, has already been mentioned, so no need to mention it again
- Volaticus
First, I enjoyed reading your poem, so thanks
I thought that the imagery and the metaphors in the poem was a very nice concept/idea.
The line "Sorry. Bliss. Anger. Boredom". For me, it's like the words don't fully match the context of the rest of the poem.
The rest I picked up on, has already been mentioned, so no need to mention it again
- Volaticus