03-29-2013, 12:21 AM
Hi saeity,
Thanks for your suggestion
I know now, that the sentence needs some work.
Hi neena,
Firstly, thank you so much. It makes me really happy to hear that you enjoy my poetry
About L2: I honestly thought, that "In the pillory, I must you hold", was grammatically correct. What I mean to say, with L2, is that I must hold/keep the perverted soul in the pillory. I'm not quite sure how to correct the sentence, at the moment.
L4: I can't believe I missed that. Thanks a lot for pointing it out to me
L5: Yes, I do mean eerie sights of whispers and voices. It's kind of hard to explain, because I know that you cannot actually see whispers and voices. It is meant to underline the chaotic/sinking/uncontrollable feeling I was trying to paint a picture of in the poem. Hope it makes any sense to you, as I am not yet very good at explaining my poems.
L6: What does tear and twist, are the whispers and voices.
You are of course welcome to ask any more questions, if needed
Cheers,
- Volaticus
Thanks for your suggestion
I know now, that the sentence needs some work.Hi neena,
Firstly, thank you so much. It makes me really happy to hear that you enjoy my poetry
About L2: I honestly thought, that "In the pillory, I must you hold", was grammatically correct. What I mean to say, with L2, is that I must hold/keep the perverted soul in the pillory. I'm not quite sure how to correct the sentence, at the moment.
L4: I can't believe I missed that. Thanks a lot for pointing it out to me
L5: Yes, I do mean eerie sights of whispers and voices. It's kind of hard to explain, because I know that you cannot actually see whispers and voices. It is meant to underline the chaotic/sinking/uncontrollable feeling I was trying to paint a picture of in the poem. Hope it makes any sense to you, as I am not yet very good at explaining my poems.
L6: What does tear and twist, are the whispers and voices.
You are of course welcome to ask any more questions, if needed
Cheers,
- Volaticus