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[neena2504]

To the perverted soul, I told:
In the pillory, I must you hold, - is something missing here?
Until the hours, the dreams, the nights,
Turns to me with eerie sights, - it should be 'turn' as it comes for plural words(hours, dreams, nights)
Of whispers and voices and all the latter, - do you mean eerie sights of whispers and voices?
Tears and twists, until both, we shatter. - what does tear and twist here?

Hi volaticus,

Your poem is beautiful, I like the reading it out loud very much.
I have suggested few corrections in L2 and L4.
The rest(L5, L6) are my questions to you, it would be great if you could answer them, I am trying to comprehend your poem completely.

Cheers