03-27-2013, 06:46 AM
Hi Mattie,
Sorry I never replied to you. =[
Thanks for your comment. I agree that that ending would be more positive, but I guess I'm too negative of a writer to want to change it. ;p ;p
In all seriousness though, what I want to do here is give a contrast between the light and the dark cycles of life, so don't want to give it too much of a "happily ever after" ending. But I appreciate the comment.
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All,
I stepped away from it for a while and came up with a 2nd edit. Would you, dear reader, mind taking a look at it and sharing your thoughts? I'd love some feedback, whether you think I'm going in the right direction or not with the new stanzas. Any and all comments totally welcome, I'm invested in this one, and want to get it right. =]
Sorry I never replied to you. =[
Thanks for your comment. I agree that that ending would be more positive, but I guess I'm too negative of a writer to want to change it. ;p ;p
In all seriousness though, what I want to do here is give a contrast between the light and the dark cycles of life, so don't want to give it too much of a "happily ever after" ending. But I appreciate the comment.
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All,
I stepped away from it for a while and came up with a 2nd edit. Would you, dear reader, mind taking a look at it and sharing your thoughts? I'd love some feedback, whether you think I'm going in the right direction or not with the new stanzas. Any and all comments totally welcome, I'm invested in this one, and want to get it right. =]
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.