03-26-2013, 02:21 AM
Hey there,
Good work on the edit, yes it makes more sense now. You're halfway there, now all you need to do is address the problem of continuity. The first two stanzas feel and flow very differently from the others. I see what you wanted to do, and story-wise you succeeded, but there needs to be more of a connection between the first and last parts. Keep at it!
Good work on the edit, yes it makes more sense now. You're halfway there, now all you need to do is address the problem of continuity. The first two stanzas feel and flow very differently from the others. I see what you wanted to do, and story-wise you succeeded, but there needs to be more of a connection between the first and last parts. Keep at it!
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.