Descent from the Cross (Happy Easter)

[softlyfalling]

Hi Amy,

Nice Easter Poem. I like some of the light touches you added.

Acute was his agony, blood on a rose.--Rose of Sharon, nice. It also ties in with the crown of thorns
Acute the temptation of his mind.--tempted in all things
His ruined hands cradle salvation for those--like the image and phrasing
who designed his diadem unkind.--crown of thorns
But, his wisdom’s source cannot be owned,
nor can the tomb he shelters in-
both diminish him to flesh and bone
which he will requite to heaven again.--these lines are where you transcend simple retelling. My only suggestion which is probably nothing more than a preference on my part is to cut the final line and end on flesh and bone which feels much stronger.

(no proselytizing intentions here...my own faith is eclectic but I believe all faiths are essentially integral)

Either way I enjoyed it.

Best,

Todd

Are you certain? I was thinking that the penultimate line was analogous to the death of Christ and the final line was analogous to the resurrection and ascension. If you can please comment on that before i make and edit, i would appreciate it very much.