Life, My Life

[ThePoetStephen]

I'm new and whatever advice you could give me would be wonderful thanks alot in advance

I watch, I watch my life pass me by,
I watch my life through the corner of my eye.
I want to take charge I want to make a change,
But why do i feel as though trapped in a cage?
Struggling the breath,
In pain gritting my teeth.
Whats the point? "It's not gonna work,
The times running out on the clock"
I run around helter skelter,
But only to find i have one shelter.
This cage , this cage in my heart,
This cage i want to tear apart.
I want to open up to someone.
I want to talk,
Maybe when I'm finally free even go for a walk.
Yes i know I'm not bond,
But what is that ringing sound?
Oh yes now i remember,
My heart is cold just like December.

I have a hard time critiquing poetry because it's so personal and deep. I really enjoyed it and felt as if I could really feel the emotion you put into writing it. I know this isn't much if your looking for someone to go over and try to correct but I simply believe poetry isn't something correctable.