Life, My Life

[milo]

Much appreciated guys, Milo im quiet knew at this and i don't even know what a triolet is but i'll make sure to do my research once again much appreciated guys

yes, you are quite new. We all were at one time.
A triolet? It may be the most claustrophobic regular form so it forces a focus and discipline onto new writers. I 'distilled' your poem into a triolet to give you an example. Do that a few times then build it back.

In poetry it is not /what/ you say, it is all how you say it.