Descent from the Cross (Happy Easter)

[Todd]

Hi Amy,

Nice Easter Poem. I like some of the light touches you added.

Acute was his agony, blood on a rose.--Rose of Sharon, nice. It also ties in with the crown of thorns
Acute the temptation of his mind.--tempted in all things
His ruined hands cradle salvation for those--like the image and phrasing
who designed his diadem unkind.--crown of thorns
But, his wisdom’s source cannot be owned,
nor can the tomb he shelters in-
both diminish him to flesh and bone
which he will requite to heaven again.--these lines are where you transcend simple retelling. My only suggestion which is probably nothing more than a preference on my part is to cut the final line and end on flesh and bone which feels much stronger.

(no proselytizing intentions here...my own faith is eclectic but I believe all faiths are essentially integral)

Either way I enjoyed it.

Best,

Todd