Man & Wife

[NakedBear]

Dreamcast silver
solid pikes,
made out of human skulls.

Window seated
man and wife,
drown the coach with love.

Angry voices in my head
sense the sight
and smile.

Midnight murder flowing red;
cold delight
reviles.

L3: drop 'out'
L7: I wonder how a voice smiles, so maybe 'people' instead.

Is speaker murdering man and wife by drowning them in their coach? Or is the couple committing murder of the coach? It isn't exactly clear to me what is going on here. Luckily the reading goes along fairly smoothly, which is good.

Generally I think the first stanza is most unclear. What is "dreamcast" and how does that and 'silver' relate to pikes made of skulls?

I think a little more clairity could really make this poem work well. Its macabre enough to tickly me funny bones, and it all sounds pretty good.

Mikey.