03-22-2013, 10:18 AM
This feels wet. Feels lonely. However, an almost serene acceptance with the "night shift". I get this acceptance with the closing stanza.
"Close the blinds curtains
Keep the darkness in"
As if this is a better place in this life to be at this time.
I know some may suggest grammatical corrections or structure changes, I like the mood and rhythm of the chop. It has a sense of RAW emotion. It worked for me.
I am not inclined to suggest anything.
"Close the blinds curtains
Keep the darkness in"
As if this is a better place in this life to be at this time.
I know some may suggest grammatical corrections or structure changes, I like the mood and rhythm of the chop. It has a sense of RAW emotion. It worked for me.
I am not inclined to suggest anything.