03-21-2013, 01:00 AM
I love the first of your suggested edits and thank you for the input. It sometimes takes a more detached ear to hear all of the rhythms and patterns, don't you think?
But, the second suggestion, I will gratefully and humbly decline...I believe to change it like this would alter the entire meaning...the way it is written, my body is responding to erotic touch. The way you suggest changes that to my own action, my song, even if it comes from the arousal of touch.
I hope that even makes sense. That is how I feel it.
But, the second suggestion, I will gratefully and humbly decline...I believe to change it like this would alter the entire meaning...the way it is written, my body is responding to erotic touch. The way you suggest changes that to my own action, my song, even if it comes from the arousal of touch.
I hope that even makes sense. That is how I feel it.