Comme un Violon

[Todd]

Hi Amy,

This sets a nice mood. Some suggestions to consider:

I'm going to make some cuts and changes because its easier to show you what I mean. Not trying to rewrite just play editor for a bit.

Comme un Violon

I resonate with Your fingertip confessions--love this
On my arching neck resonate.
You breathe deeply,
Lips parted.
I sing with every rhythmic stroke
On my humming body.
We are as one
Making music.

I know it is my second one today....I will do LOTS of commenting to atone

Enjoyed this