03-20-2013, 09:15 PM
In some places this poem can be very adult, and in others mildly juvenile.
"had obviously had no practice with math." here you can get rid of one "had"
I'd like this better without a comma too: "Telling you this isn't America, either;"
Overall it's very circular, and I like poems that start and end in the same realm.
"had obviously had no practice with math." here you can get rid of one "had"
I'd like this better without a comma too: "Telling you this isn't America, either;"
Overall it's very circular, and I like poems that start and end in the same realm.
I'll be there in a minute.