Thirst
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(03-19-2013, 09:50 PM)Carile Wrote:  She was in a frosty morning
Born with a pine needle
In her heart;
And was given
No milk, no blood. She's shifting in ashes.
I'm thinking she's born as a frozen dew drop, clinging to the tip of a pine needle.

She's been thirsty ever since she opened her eyes,
When would she open her eyes? Maybe with the sun and thaws, which would cause her to refract light. Hence the reference to 'nimbus' below?But why thirsty? If a dew drop were conscious, what would it wish to drink?

Seeing every other nimbus
blowing away as soon
As she gazes,
Making rivers
And lakes and drapes all flow vertically:
If she is a drop of water on a tree, she'd be one of millions, which might be shaken loose and fall, cascading down to the earth?

She's been thirsty ever since she stood on her feet,
Maybe she's hit the ground too, and been sucked into the soil?

For she knows she would sink into heavens,
Were her lips to touch the sword-blade rapids.
If she were churned by the rapids, she'd evaporate.
A riddle, possibly, and a good one, if that's your intent. If it's a metaphor for a human actor, then the meanings will always be unclear to me.

Mikey.
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Messages In This Thread
Thirst - by Carile - 03-19-2013, 09:50 PM
RE: Thirst - by softlyfalling - 03-20-2013, 02:37 AM
RE: Thirst - by Todd - 03-20-2013, 05:02 AM
RE: Thirst - by NakedBear - 03-20-2013, 02:47 PM
RE: Thirst - by Carile - 03-21-2013, 03:19 AM



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