Conflicted
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I like the regular rhythm of this, it almost makes me think of an adult trying to explain something to a child who doesn't understand what they've done wrong.
I think the second last line could be changed slightly to flow better, maybe "But here I sit, alone again."
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Conflicted - by Aphroditeny - 03-16-2013, 09:01 PM
RE: Conflicted - by cocoisland - 03-19-2013, 01:34 PM
RE: Conflicted - by Carile - 03-19-2013, 09:36 PM



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